The prologue

[Rob Wick]

Quote:Rob: How's the writing going?

Bill,

Thanks for asking. I've got the prologue out to a couple of friends who are reading it over, and I'm letting it sit while I continue to print out Tarbell's letters.

Quote:Rob, overall this is very good but you need a hook. The first couple of sentences should encourage the reader to continue on. Maybe something about the presence of two titans filling the room… Was there ever any controversy between the two? I would like to sense the feeling Sandburg had that day. Was it joy in his task or sadness that Ida could not be there. Do we know how Ida felt about not attending? Make it emotional and then explain the outcome.

The college newspaper, The Campus, overflowed with homecoming-related news. Freshmen
were asked, in defiance of long-time tradition, not to wear their pajamas to the homecoming
football game against long-time rival Grove City as a scheduled “fight” between the freshmen
Repetitious - Time honored tradition

Carl Sandburg, the featured speaker for the dedication of the Lincoln Room, smiled at students
from the front page of the paper. Students and alumni could meet Sandburg at what was billed as
First I thought he smiled from behind the front page of the paper but that did not make sense. Maybe you can reword the sentence to make it clear his face was printed on the page.
Evidence of that appeared in Sandburg’s presence.
Wouldn’t he have attended anyway?

Thanks for the comments. I have changed some of it to be a little more explanatory, and I'm also thinking of adding some more detail about Tarbell and more of her feelings, although she was very reticent with most people, so it's not easy to find.

Best
Rob