The prologue

[RJNorton]

Rob, I am very poor at constructive criticism, so I will leave that to others. You don't want people to simply say they like what you write, but I am going to say that anyway. I enjoyed reading it.

Regarding commas, when I was in school, I was taught that when you use a city and state together, a comma is used to separate the city from the state and after the state. I think I saw at least 3 instances where you didn't put a comma after the state. We can let Laurie make her ruling on this.