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Rob Wick · 10-27-2012, 10:21 AM

Well, I've finished the fourth draft of the prologue to Star Seeker After Truth. It's in enough shape that I'd like to ask a big favor of those who have lived through this project with me. The prologue will, along with one chapter, be the basis for my book proposal. As such, it has to be perfect. What I'd like is for as many who want to do this, to download the file attached and read and comment on it.

To give some background. The prologue will serve as the dramatic opening of the book, over and above the introduction. I will contrast this with a coda that will discuss Tarbell's relevance in light of a speech by Benjamin Thomas in 1946. In between, of course, will be the story itself.

What I would like is for those who read it to give me feedback not only on its readability, but does it make sense? While I certainly enjoy people telling me they like what I write, constructive criticism is much more preferred as it tends to make it better. Is my phrasing OK? Do I make too much of one thing and not enough of another? And, Laurie, is it grammatically correct? For a writer, I struggle with grammar and punctuation. <sigh>

Take your time with it and please, be honest. I've been a writer long enough to know that criticism properly channeled is designed to make something better. My ego can take it.

Thanks!

Best
Rob