(11-06-2013, 10:34 PM)Rob Wick Wrote: How about this?
"Looking at her papers at my leisure, I soon realized that herein lay the workings of another study."
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Rob
Although I pledged myself not to comment on this again and although the world sure will keep on turning even if I won't find out the following, but - I still don't know what "herein" refers to and thus if was her papers or your looking at them that needed all your efforts. Although I assume it was the papers, I still find the sentence, well...a bit odd. Also, "workings" and "study" IMO is a tautology. (Personally, I would prefer something like: "Reading her papers...,I soon realized they/this required another study".)
(11-06-2013, 09:03 PM)Rob Wick Wrote: At the time I wrote it, the sentence seemed to fit rhythmically into the paragraph.
Forgive me, Rob, not your sentense, only this comment just reminded me of the story that Paul Mc Cartney's original text for "Yesterday" was "Scrambled eggs, oh, my baby, how I love your legs" because it fitted into the tune...